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Post by Nerx on Fri Apr 10, 2015 8:12 am



_Background_
Julian Manolo is an an esper, someone who can harness psionic force. He  specialises on dynakinesis. He was born into an orphanage as his immigrant parents left him by their doorstep and grew up there under the care of the caretakers until the age of twelve where he was adopted by young entrepreneurs. From the couple he learned a bit about the corporate world. The kid first learned of his powers when he subconsciously shifted lightning that was about to hit his father, on the man's way out the door during Thanksgiving he screamed as he saw a flash.

He would later grow up to be an aspiring young architect, while dipping into the foray of land development. In most of his life his powers are kept out of sight so that he can mold into normal society, yet there is a hidden yearning to see how far he can go. There have been some exceptions where he is forced to act to keep the safety of his family but currently he is working away from them. Regardless of location he is using his own abilities to make life easier for them. Keeping touch with the old as he sends fiscal aid, sometimes visiting on reunions. As an anonymous donator he would improve on the orphanage where he grew up.

There was a period in his life during college years where he joined the French Foreign Legion after he got caught in a bar fight. After seeing his performance during their training he was given point duty, Julian killed his first man while under his mission. He used his bare hands, it changed him after he heard the last breath. After that experience and a few more he went to a PMC  and got paid quite a lot guarding oil fields in foreign land. Again using his powers under disguise as he made sure bullets against his comrades only made glancing blows.

During the period of switching jobs his favourite was serving coffee in his small shop downtown, not as quiet as the office life or as hectic as providing cover fire for his squad-mates across national borders. However under the front of a great expresso place the small house offers odd-jobs for high paying clients. Most of them are lucrative, and more than enough to fund his other businesses along with tactical gear. However the risks are high enough that 82% would count as suicide missions. Sometime he would offer pro-bono for those in serious need.

As the scope gets narrower things become much more dangerous, he began to see others like him. They are different in scale or in their ability but they belong in another world that humans should not tread. It made him realise that world is a much bigger place, back then he was inexperienced. His experience in the field gave him numerous advantages that his less battle conditioned foes do not have in the urban jungle. Yet the streets keep calling his name, and the more he tries to escape the more he gets entangled in the web on intrigue.

It was on an overseas trip where Julian learned it the hard way when a demon cut off his leg. He was dying because his body does not heal better than a normal human, he was trapped in the mountains. The whole skirmish took place in japan but he was saved by a shrine maiden who applied a talisman to stop the bleeding, yet for him his leg cannot be reattached. During his stand off he managed to cripple the demon by collapsing its spinal column, he was stalling.

Pushing his limits long enough for reinforcements to arrive. Julian passed out and reawaken on her lap, they looked at each other eye to eye.  After the stay with the woman's warmth he realised that he needed to hone his powers like he did his body during camp. Showing their gratitude at his tenacity and grit one of the senior masters gave his time to thank the man. Julian got training from a sohei in esoteric philosophy (which helped him in design later on in life) and meditated. The old man helped Jimmy in understanding Reiki, but he applies them to his powers instead of acquiring new spirit power.

He still has a long way to go but during his experience in the shrine he found a partner for his future, she abdicated her position to a younger prodigy and they moved out to cohabit elsewhere. He helped her adjust from her rustic setting to the new one, trained her in his lifestyle as her master did to him. Now she is familiar with military tactics and can lead her own paramilitary force, enough to overpower a small latin american dictatorship. She also taught him how to create talismans, unlike her aptitude in picking up his skills Julian did not reach the same success.

Julian moved back to tell his parents about the news. He did not divulge about the fighting and the demons, but he did tell them about the girl.  He started his own company, it started with fine capital since he knows how to allocate his money to the right place. His organisation is one that is shaped by his life experience. It wasn’t long before others took notice of his fine service and gave him a loyal following. Currently he is on the fast track to a huge conglomeration. He is reaching into great heights in Southeast Asia, and Africa.

Working behind the theatre while his partner takes the name of the company to be its representative. As long as the public is concerned he is the miracle worker while she is the one who runs the operations. With them in synergy they built factories with repurposed technology (based on the talismans) to reduce waste, creating jobs while maintaining the environment. Becoming media darlings in third world countries, even though they are in an open relationship they enjoy each other's company.

Then he lost his vision...

As he stands he is comparable to Marcus Licinius Crassus in personal wealth, his company is comparable to the VoC, and with his powers he is like King Solomon. He is also a venture capitalist.

_His stand_
He is a neutral and works to extract/enrich natural resources and building property. These powers help him maintain a tight grip on the energy business.  He doesn't really do the heroics or the nasty deeds done by so called villains. Julian wants to give back to society, and follows his own corporate agenda. Sometimes this means sitting in the room with key individuals from the government across the table, and telling them why their policies are not in their best interest. Other times this means turning industrial spies into molten slag and returning their remains to competitors.

“fire-spewing, bling-hoarding, virgin-chomping beast"

Family and friends are always a priority for him, and he will gladly sacrifice others as many as necessary to ensure their safety. In lethal fights he tries to end it as soon as possible, psionics will be used to find organs and finish them. He hates the idea of them coming back to endanger his social circle. He hits to maim, he combines his strikes to cripple and would often leave his foes as invalids. The man is open to new experience and would finance political parties to push his ideas.

For a negative qualities he is known to be petty, lecherous and would sometimes display draconic behaviour (hoarding, etc.), He doesn't want the world to end and despite the fact that he’s a egoistical son of a bitch he stills sees himself as an ally of justice.

loves oppai, and it will always work as a distraction.

_His powers_

For an apt comparison he treats his 'powers' as a body, these extensions below are merely his techniques like a 'punch' or a 'kick'. Comparing it to a human body he is at the stage of a toddler learning his place in the world.


  • energy:

-Kinetic surge: As a manipulator of energy he does not want to get punched. He has high resistance to this type of energy but he constantly trains to achieve proper immunity.
-Surge booster: energies that he can absorb will be refocused into amping his physical stats and structural integrity. Most opponents think that fighting him over time will weaken him, but he usually ends up progressively stronger.
-Surge hammer/feedback: those he cant will be sent to the ground our back a the sender. This creates shockwaves or painful impact to the enemy.
- Silent light: Invisible lasers. He hates it when projectile weaponry gets traced back to him.
- Ballistic berserker: using large objects as projectiles launched at high velocities. Whether it be for railgun emulation or kinetic bombardment.
- Rouser’s Sword: imitating slashing or piercing attacks is also another favourite. Works well on medium and far range.

He likes to use plasma, since near misses cause 3rd degree burns and armours tend to blacken even before contact is made. Particle charged lasers are another for extra kinetic damage.



  • skills

-tight guard:  to pressure with attacks with relatively little worry of flush counter attacks.
-leg catching: displacing opponent to a vulnerable position with a kick-catch.
-feints, and utilizing their reactions.
-head movement/parries/blocks. Tight, minimal, just enough.
-analyzing opponents guard. Patient, dissecting.
-balance and a base. Being mindful of your place.
-posture, and the important of controlling posture from top of bottom.
-control from dominate position.
-the general understandings of positions, and the calmness that comes with it.

Bionic Eyes
Which can switch between infrared, night and normal vision, as well as zoom in. They see a higher spectrum of light than normal eyes and are considerably sharper and better at processing visual data. An advance interface also allows predicting movement path and distances. Custom made.

_Measure_
He is a major driving force behind an NGO 'superpower' that is close to the original sense of the word which includes monetary and political as well. As one of the leading forces of an organisation that can act to threaten 'one' of to pre-existing superpowers (America/China/Russia/France/UK) when it comes to non combat power because of the competence of its members.

He can stop America from using it's nuclear arsenal period by simply destroying the football or the biscuit. Lose one and America literally has no nuclear defense because one is the only system that allows said nukes to be used in the first place, and the second is the key code that lets you operate the first.


By making him your ally, a country gains a place as a world superpower.

To put on a scale he would rate a 0.7 on the Kardashev scale. He capable of one-shotting a city block or defending it from those who can. However he hates unnecessary conflict and prefer to use fear of the known.

speed - mach 5
reactions - double the speed
strength - without the power allocation he is strong enough to knock someone out or overpower them should he want to ravish them. With it he can psionically fortify his skeletal structural integrity, augment the density and efficiency of his muscular systems, increase the resilience of their fleshy tissue in order to exert physical strength beyond what is natural. Extending to physical strength and durability,  able to exhibit feats of incredible physical prowess.

utterly devastating at long range (fond of "fly and fry"), reasonable at mid range, manageable at close range

_Character_
5’11 in height, lean body build (gymnast), has a nice firm ass, unassuming look, grey hair, left leg under his thigh is a cybernetic prosthetic (fitted with a shotgun, which he ratchets by raising knee; shells go into the knee and out from the ball of the feet. Comes with vibro-bayonet located on the back of the heel).

Always walks with a stick (weighs a lot, made from exotic materia; neutroniuml) for public appearances, and on media interviews he likes to wear casual (golfing clothes). On the videos he is almost never seen without his polo.

_Weakness_
Disabled, at least he can park conveniently.
Reluctant to fight
Numerous scandals of affairs
Oppai Wink

_Meta_
HST wise he is top tier, and his defensive capabilities rely on energy manipulation. Has the typical issue of 'meat in the machine'. He can be taken off guard, like when the demon removed his leg during his stint in japan. His interactions with the Govt bodies are similar to Yujiro Hanma, he can do things and get away with them.


Last edited by Nerx on Tue Apr 21, 2015 11:14 pm; edited 11 times in total (Reason for editing : Nerfing)
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Fri Apr 10, 2015 10:12 am

Alright.... I love the effort but please fix the characters powers and abilities to better match the setting's guidelines when it comes to the abilities and powers of the character. Thank You.

If your wondering what I'm referring to, here is a link:
http://othusvice.bestesforum.com/t113-ideas-for-the-rpg-world-discussion-thread

I'm currently busy right now, but if you want specific areas that need to be edited please feel free to ask, I know you are an experience RPGer, but this character is slightly unfit to match the current guidelines of what we are aiming for in this setting.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Fri Apr 10, 2015 2:27 pm

I added the extra title in the heading because the character is currently not going to be fit in the setting and I want to make sure that fellow users don't confuse this Bio and the characters scale of power as being acceptable in the setting.

Once the fixes are made, I will change the heading or you can do it yourself when the proper revisions are made.

Again, if your unsure of the issues with this character, I am more than willing to work together with you to make the character fit into the setting.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Fri Apr 10, 2015 7:00 pm

Got it, will edit this one

can you delete the other thread?
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Fri Apr 10, 2015 7:39 pm

waybig1010101 wrote:I added the extra title in the heading because the character is currently not going to be fit in the setting and I want to make sure that fellow users don't confuse this Bio and the characters scale of power as being acceptable in the setting.

Once the fixes are made, I will change the heading or you can do it yourself when the proper revisions are made.

Again, if your unsure of the issues with this character, I am more than willing to work together with you to make the character fit into the setting.

any better?
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Fri Apr 10, 2015 8:01 pm

Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:I added the extra title in the heading because the character is currently not going to be fit in the setting and I want to make sure that fellow users don't confuse this Bio and the characters scale of power as being acceptable in the setting.

Once the fixes are made, I will change the heading or you can do it yourself when the proper revisions are made.

Again, if your unsure of the issues with this character, I am more than willing to work together with you to make the character fit into the setting.

any better?

A little, but he is still too powerful, he is currently a one man army kinda deal.

For example, for speed most characters at max for the most part would be hypersonic = Mach 5 and only characters who specialize in speed as whole be allowed to be massively hypersonic at maybe Mach 25 or something along those lines.

Reaction speeds can be higher than their movement speed of course, but nothing too crazy.

Also remove the part about if he tries he can get infinite more powerful or whatever, that is kinda unnecessary and would be way outside the limits of the setting

also moves and techniques can not be able to be as potent as being able to target at the molecular/atomic/sub atomic or smaller levels as well.

Also no character is going to be able to rival a major government by themselves
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by DarkWaspSting on Fri Apr 10, 2015 8:22 pm

That's still a lot of powers. Especially worrying is the mind rewriting. That's just flat broken.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Fri Apr 10, 2015 8:26 pm

DarkWaspSting wrote:That's still a lot of powers. Especially worrying is the mind rewriting. That's just flat broken.

This too^
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Fri Apr 10, 2015 9:21 pm

[quote="waybig1010101"]
Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:
Also no character is going to be able to rival a major government by themselves
How can I emulate a threat (not rival but enough to make them uneasy) to government, without being army level?
is there a minimal requirement?

Speed wise he is at about mach 6

got it

DarkWaspSting wrote:That's still a lot of powers. Especially worrying is the mind rewriting. That's just flat broken.
let me edit that.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Fri Apr 10, 2015 10:20 pm

Thats the thing, no character should be a super threat to a major government by themselves. (Especially rivaling them or surpassing them with the use of force) I can seem them being a problem, but not actually treating them in any extreme ways.

Also change the speed to Mach 5 then to match the setting for his movement speed, honestly don't imagine a situation where he needs to move super fast from one location to another for what we are trying to do here.

"He is useful for defending the planet itself"

please Edit this out, there is no need to defend the planet itself and makes your character scaling seem inconsistent with what he is going to be dealing with
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Chef_Banchou on Fri Apr 10, 2015 10:59 pm

Honestly, your character looks extremely interesting and unique! I genuinely love how much effort and detail you put into his backstory! But, unfortunetly, what Waybig and Dark said is true, he's just way too powerful.

First of all, I personally have no real problem with you making his movement speed mach 6. However, saying that his reactions are far above that, is a bit excessive. No character would ever be able to tag him with conventional weapons, or even suped up weapons, without resorting to PIS or CIS; leaving characters who are only sub-sonic/supersonic in reactions or fighting speed, or who have equipment (such as guns) that allow them to attack at only such a speed, would be utterly screwed, should Jimmy decide to off them.

Also, you might wanna think about shortening his list of abilities, or at least removing some of the more broken stuff. Mind manipulation and whatnot can be quite controversial in a roleplay, and can easily lead to god-modding.

That being said, I think that your character is mostly fine, he just needs to be nerfed to somewhere around street level, rather than being a one man army. I do like the creativity you put into him, though! So great job on that. :]
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Sat Apr 11, 2015 6:41 am

waybig1010101 wrote:Thats the thing, no character should be a super threat to a major government by themselves. (Especially rivaling them or surpassing them with the use of force) I can seem them being a problem, but not actually treating them in any extreme ways.

Also change the speed to Mach 5 then to match the setting for his movement speed, honestly don't imagine a situation where he needs to move super fast from one location to another for what we are trying to do here.

"He is useful for defending the planet itself"

please Edit this out, there is no need to defend the planet itself and makes your character scaling seem inconsistent with what he is going to be dealing with
let me get on that then

Chef_Banchou wrote:Honestly, your character looks extremely interesting and unique! I genuinely love how much effort and detail you put into his backstory! But, unfortunetly, what Waybig and Dark said is true, he's just way too powerful.

First of all, I personally have no real problem with you making his movement speed mach 6. However, saying that his reactions are far above that, is a bit excessive. No character would ever be able to tag him with conventional weapons, or even suped up weapons, without resorting to PIS or CIS; leaving characters who are only sub-sonic/supersonic in reactions or fighting speed, or who have equipment (such as guns) that allow them to attack at only such a speed, would be utterly screwed, should Jimmy decide to off them.

Also, you might wanna think about shortening his list of abilities, or at least removing some of the more broken stuff. Mind manipulation and whatnot can be quite controversial in a roleplay, and can easily lead to god-modding.

That being said, I think that your character is mostly fine, he just needs to be nerfed to somewhere around street level, rather than being a one man army. I do like the creativity you put into him, though! So great job on that. :]
allow me to make some adjustments, he will get another disability
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Sat Apr 11, 2015 2:42 pm

"overall being above the U.S military's context as to essentially be doom incarnate (But can be taken down with joint assault from multinational effort)."

"The military's morale won't hold for very long against a one who cannot even properly damage with it's conventional arsenal while said threat can obliterate all their divisions and fleets by the truckload in moments. After a month it is predicted that military would surrender after losing pretty much all combat effectiveness when he destroys the logistics chain that allows the military to work, the fact that he probably just murdered hundreds of thousands of soldiers would also probably factor into the military surrendering."

Still too strong

Also the setting is actually going to be 100 years into the future, so governments have much more advance tech along with their own arsenal of super beings to use as weapons as well, so one character is not going to be able to match the might of a powerful government by themselves, especially in terms of military powers.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Sat Apr 11, 2015 9:50 pm

waybig1010101 wrote:"overall being above the U.S military's context as to essentially be doom incarnate (But can be taken down with joint assault from multinational effort)."

"The military's morale won't hold for very long against a one who cannot even properly damage with it's conventional arsenal while said threat can obliterate all their divisions and fleets by the truckload in moments. After a month it is predicted that military would surrender after losing pretty much all combat effectiveness when he destroys the logistics chain that allows the military to work, the fact that he probably just murdered hundreds of thousands of soldiers would also probably factor into the military surrendering."

Still too strong

Also the setting is actually going to be 100 years into the future, so governments have much more advance tech along with their own arsenal of super beings to use as weapons as well, so one character is not going to be able to match the might of a powerful government by themselves, especially in terms of military powers.

Edited those things
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Sat Apr 11, 2015 10:08 pm

Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:"overall being above the U.S military's context as to essentially be doom incarnate (But can be taken down with joint assault from multinational effort)."

"The military's morale won't hold for very long against a one who cannot even properly damage with it's conventional arsenal while said threat can obliterate all their divisions and fleets by the truckload in moments. After a month it is predicted that military would surrender after losing pretty much all combat effectiveness when he destroys the logistics chain that allows the military to work, the fact that he probably just murdered hundreds of thousands of soldiers would also probably factor into the military surrendering."

Still too strong

Also the setting is actually going to be 100 years into the future, so governments have much more advance tech along with their own arsenal of super beings to use as weapons as well, so one character is not going to be able to match the might of a powerful government by themselves, especially in terms of military powers.

Edited those things


Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Sat Apr 11, 2015 11:27 pm

waybig1010101 wrote:
Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.

edited
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Sat Apr 11, 2015 11:51 pm

Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:
Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.

edited

Still too strong... but your getting closer
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Sun Apr 12, 2015 9:44 am

waybig1010101 wrote:
Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:
Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.

edited

Still too strong... but your getting closer
more directions, please
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Sun Apr 12, 2015 9:45 am

Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:
Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:
Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.

edited

Still too strong... but your getting closer
more directions, please

stuff like this

He may not be able to outrace the fastest jets but his field can shrug off most MILSpec weapons, decimate (1/10) large formations with one sweep of his laser cone or simply bulldoze through them with the kinetic coat, massive strength and striking power, and overall being frighteningly near to the military of a Superpower.
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Post by YinYangSona on Sun Apr 12, 2015 12:12 pm

He needs to come down in power at least another 2 to 3 pegs. Then I think you may have it.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Thu Apr 16, 2015 8:11 am

waybig1010101 wrote:
stuff like this

He may not be able to outrace the fastest jets but his field can shrug off most MILSpec weapons, decimate (1/10) large formations with one sweep of his laser cone or simply bulldoze through them with the kinetic coat, massive strength and striking power, and overall being frighteningly near to the military of a Superpower.
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YinYangSona wrote:He needs to come down in power at least another 2 to 3 pegs. Then I think you may have it.
done
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Othus on Thu Apr 16, 2015 7:57 pm

wow so many tweaks!!!
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Sun Apr 19, 2015 8:06 am

waybig1010101 wrote:
Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.
How bout now?

The Idea is that his group can do that, he's just one of their big guns.

Othus wrote:wow so many tweaks!!!
they good?
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by waybig1010101 on Tue Apr 21, 2015 10:05 am

Nerx wrote:
waybig1010101 wrote:
Okay.... better but his power (by himself) should not even come close to being able to match a major government in term so of military might. Remember, they have future tech and their own super beings at their disposal.
How bout now?

The Idea is that his group can do that, he's just one of their big guns.

Othus wrote:wow so many tweaks!!!
they good?

sorry for the late response Razz

But, its getting better... but a group outside the main super power forces of the world today are above and beyond the super powers of the Cold War era.... so keep that in mind. But the idea that its a group effort does make it better, but again each major Government is going to have their own Big guns in terms of super beings at their disposal, so one group to match them is still a bit much in some ways, but overall yes... its makes better.
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Re: Jimmy Bolo Bio - Edit -

Post by Nerx on Tue Apr 21, 2015 11:12 pm

waybig1010101 wrote:

sorry for the late response Razz

But, its getting better... but a group outside the main super power forces of the world today are above and beyond the super powers of the Cold War era.... so keep that in mind. But the idea that its a group effort does make it better, but again each major Government is going to have their own Big guns in terms of super beings at their disposal, so one group to match them is still a bit much in some ways, but overall yes... its makes better.
did some edits, this aite?
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